Remi-le-Oduen's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Christmas Sukeban]

She'll bash Christmas spirit right into your head

kukuruyo responds:

Most likely

[Sweet Sixteen Comic Contest Award Ceremony Comic]

That was really awesome to read the entries, huge thanks for organizing the event, and huge thanks for all the participants.

KittyhawkMontrose responds:

I'm glad to hear you had fun reading all the entries. That's what I want to hear! I had a lot of fun running this event, all because of the participants!

[Witch Study 🔮✨]

From the look of it, she is trying to come up with a "tidy up this mess of a room" spell

Damare-Draws responds:

oh, that makes sense!

[How do I name her]

Llumi

SrHerbii responds:

Actually a good name, gonna go with that thanks.

[Ivy]

The potato thing behind doesn't want to be ignored

carmine3 responds:

photobomb

[Concure Baltazar Vol 1 - Chapter 1 and 2]

It seems interesting, but the info dump at the start... Would be too much even for a book, and for comics that are supposed to be visuals more than text, it's WAY too much. It's better when the worldbuilding is shown through characters, their experience and viewpoints. By the next page the reader will forget half of that history you poured on the first one.
At the beginning, I think it's enough to give the map (the map is actually most always a wise choice) and some more or less specific location where the character is. The rest of the history or geography is unnecessary to hook the reader with the first page. It can even scare them

SnoopRamen responds:

Yeah, the info was too much from the start. I should start with the focus on characters first for their goals. I should minimize text to give a clear context on what's going on from the start. As for the map in the beginning you just mentioned shows the past of the history of my worldbuilding. I forgot to place city names. As for the mc, I think I would keep his birthplace a secret for the future spoilers. Thanks for the criticism! (Oh, and also, I put your comment in my criticism notice document, so I won't forget to make this same mistake again.)

[10 Things Not To Do In Iran]

Russia is going more and more similar to this...

ChazDude responds:

How long before they just outright ban gay sex, I wonder.

[The mystery of the Gikika Spider]

Love it, a good look in how evolution works

vlsrb responds:

Thank you very much for this comment, glad you liked the comic!

[Night in Paris]

What is she writing?

Vixit responds:

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